Illustrated Backstory Redesign

[Liam]

I'm all for keeping the present tense, given it's not an EG article. But one thing that did jump out at me during the initial read through was the style. We seem to lurch from history-lecturer on page 1 to poet on page 3, and it's a litter jarring.

I'm also not sure what's going on with the first bit of a timeline appearing on page 1. It implies a chronological account, but then doesn't appear again in the next few pages.