Stand at Carpo (Revised)

[Ace009]

Well, that we tried in the first edition. Look how well that ended.

It's been a while since you posted the earlier versions of the story to the forum, so I went back and took a look at them.

If you mean this version of the story and my response to it (in Post #3), I said that it was a good start, but that it still needed work. I did not say that it wasn't working or that it needed to be removed from the story.

I also then posted feedback on the rest of the story, but it doesn't appear that you responded to any of it, at least in that thread. If there is another thread where you did respond and I've just missed it, please point me at it.

EDIT: Something that might be helpful would be for you to post a brief summary of what this conflict is about and who the principle combatants are. That might help in putting together a fictional 'excerpt from a book' to introduce the story.

Thanks!

Todd

Oh.......well, NOW I get it. I can do the excerpts with ease. The remainder might be more of a problem (for me, at least). And the acronyms and some jargon are in the Google Docs version. So.........