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Solipsist Panvirtuality

Resource Base: The Panvirtuality prefers large hot bright stars any unclaimed stars up to O-type blue giants, but will appropriate and star systems down to red dwarfs.

might be better as

Resource Base: The Panvirtuality prefers unclaimed large hot bright stars up to O-type blue giants, but will appropriate any star systems down to red dwarfs.

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The Data Panel entry

Data Net Many orders of magnitude larger and more comprehensive than that used by ordinary sapients and basic transapients of the Sephirotic polities, so much so that some say that the Panvirtuality

terminates prematurely on-screen at that point. It is a copy of the beginning of a longer sentence which appears later in the body of the article.

The Data Panel entry might be better if it were to terminate sooner, since the rest of that sentence seems to be opinion rather than data.

Data Net Many orders of magnitude larger and more comprehensive than that used by ordinary sapients and basic transapients of the Sephirotic polities.